There is a great news for IT people, SMB, Enterprise market and general computer users because Synetic Inc., one of Canada’s leading data storage manufacturers and distributers, has brought advanced data storage solutions on February 12, 2012. The release of its first own branded iSCSI Target software for 32 bits and 64 bits Microsoft Operating System is probably the best news for IT people in 2012.
This new advanced data storage solution has been done by one of the most talented iSCSI protocol engineers and it is based on the latest compliance with Internet Engineering Task Force standards.
The new advanced data offers many new features that can make lives easy for computer users. This software also supports most of the operating systems such as: Windows XP Pro, Vista, Windows 7 and server 2003 and 2008. For more information, you can visit http://www.canadait.com/cfm/index.cfm?It=106&Id=27587&Se=0&Lo=2.
The story is more appropriate for your audience, but watch your grammar, spelling and CP style. There are a lot of errors in the text. The lead is also awkward - you need to tell the readers WHY this is important to them; don't just tell them it is important. I also doubt this is the best news for anyone working in IT - it sounds like something the company (Synetic) has written. You want to make sure you cut out that type of hyperbole.
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